Peer Review Reflection

Reflecting on our peers work gives us a lot to learn from. It could be how we may look at something or interpret it compared to someone else, but the way we do analyze it differently can help our peers see our point of view. The way that I approach the revisions I do to my peers papers is try to be as beneficial as possible. When I first read their paper I do not make any comments, I will read the whole thing first or usually go by paragraphs to see how they made it flow with the rest of the paper. I personally struggle with putting things where they need to be in order. Sometimes I have a great idea but cannot seem to put it in the right placement or sometimes even struggle with how to word my thought or idea. Having someone look over the work that I did is a big benefit in my writing process to become the best writer I can be. Reading good critical feedback from my peers can help me interpret things in a way that I may not have saw it before. If I start to pick up things that my peers are saying then the next time that I write I can incorporate what I learned from them and put it into my new writing. Another strategy that I use while working with my peers is to make sure they are not only using material from the text of what we are using but also using their own point of view. It is important to use your point of view when talking about things because everyone will see things in a different way and that means if you come together will all of your ideas then it is just more knowledge that you will have. Having people look at my essays have benefitted me so much, it is a major key to becoming a better writer, and I believe you can never have enough critical good feedback from your peers.

Reading Reflection

If I look back on how this semester is going so far, I would say there have been a lot to learn. Some things that I really liked to do to try to help myself be a better writer is some prewriting strategies. Some things I like to do before I write my essays are go and read the whole speech or book or whatever it may be that we are looking at. I like to put little annotations on the side to remember what I was talking about or that may lead me to my final product in what I’m doing. Reading about ways to try and make me a better learner, there are so many. It is finding the one that works best for who you are as a learner that will make you excel in your work. Some things I think work for me as well is going back to reread what I have already written. It helps me get a good idea on things that I may have missed when I read it the first time and it also helps me get a better understanding of what I read the first time as well. While I read whatever article that we are reading I like to try and see what the main idea is about. I do this so in my mind I have an overview of what is going on in the article. Having knowledge about the article going in I believe is such at your advantage and puts you one step ahead because then most things will make sense even if it is out of context a little. Another thing I have been trying to get better at is getting better at listening to others ideas and incorporating them into my work. I think listening to others is so undervalued because sometimes people see, learn as well as interpret things differently from someone else. Having that idea that someone else may have interpreted that idea a different way you can take away what they are saying with the knowledge you have and turn it into a better overall perspective.

In Class Reflection

In the essay that I wrote I believe that integrating others ideas was a big part of writing a successful essay. This is a big part because others show you in your essay their point of view in how you are doing. Sometimes while you are writing you may think of something in your head but it may not come out clear on paper. Having the work of others go to critique your work will show you a first opinion on how you can make your sentence structures better than they were before as well as making things in the paper flow easier. For example, in my paper I described who yoshino was a little to late in the essay but having someone read it and say that it was a great way to go into describing who he was but I just needed to shift where I put in the description of him. Also integrating the ideas of other would be while you are using your quotes you took from the paper throughout the essay. When you are finding quotes in the paper to put into your essay you want to make sure that they flow nicely with what you are talking about. Having the quote connect back to where you located it in the essay is also something I try to do throughout the paper. Sometimes I have a struggle putting the right quote in the right place to make it make sense. Location of the quote you are talking about can be a big part of the essay because if you do not put it into the right context it will not make sense with what message you are trying to get across.

Identity Essay

Alex Case

ENG 123

Identity is a very big part of everyone’s everyday life. It creates who you are, how people will look at you and interpret how you portray yourself. Many people love and also hate their identity. Some may love the way that their identity comes off to other but also some people may hide their identity because they do not like who it makes them.

There are many things someone may try to hide from their identity. Someone may not like their religion or may think that they need to hide it because they cannot do something someone else may be able to do regularly. It says in the Yoshino article on page 480, “I recognize the value of assimilation, which often necessary to fluid social interaction, to peaceful coexistence and even to the dialogue through which difference is valued.” It also states on page 479 in the Kenji Yoshino article, “In our increasingly diverse society, all of us are outside the mainstream in some way.” This is saying that in the world that we live in today many people are different than other but to come together we all need to start treating each other the same with whatever identity that comes across with an in particular person.

Yoshino combines personal narrative and legal argument to lay out a new definition of civil rights. He then goes into talking about “covering” your identity. People will cover their identity for many different reasons. On page 480 in the article it says “covering has enjoyed such a robust and stubborn life because it is a form of assimilation.” When someone wants to cover up their identity the first thing I think of is hiding from people. There are so many different things that one person may do to hide their identity. The first thing that comes to my mind when I think of hiding an identity is someone who committed a crime or something bad where they do not want to be seen by anyone and want to stay unnoticed by everyone. When you do something you realize you probably should not have done that would be you being your false self. False self is something most people do not understand I believe. Being your true self and not trying to hide your identity should be what everyone does. I believe this because if you have to hide something from people, are you really being you? Everyone has their own identity and it is not 100% the same as anyone else’s.

Field Notes

1)Article on JD Martinez,

The article on JD Martinez relates very well to our school english class. I believe that it relates well because he was in a position where he was not yet there. He had made it to the pros which is an unbelievable accomplishment but he was not that star that he knew he had in him. Being a pro on the Astros but not a very at that superstar level directed his baseball career to the Red Sox. The Red Sox is where he started to excel in the outfield but most importantly his batting. J.D. realized that he had improvements to make or that he “wasn’t there yet” so he kept working hard to achieve his goals where he wanted to be. This relates to our class because we were working with the mindset yet and not yet. Having this yet an not yet mindset can get you to that superstar level at whatever skill you’re trying to accomplish.

2) Interview Noah Spagnolo,

I interviewed Noah Spagnolo, also  goes by the  nickname  “Spags” around campus. He came to the University of New England from Rhode Island for the 3+4 early assurance accelerated dental medicine program. He attended Bishop Hendricken high school which is an all boys Catholic high school. The main focus that Noah had coming to college was getting good grades to stay in the rigorous dental program he had already been accepted into. After all the years of schooling Noah would like to one day open and manage his own dental practice. He sees many perks in opening his own dental office such as the ability to make your own schedule,  earn a comfortable amount of money, and the ability to be his own boss. Noah is a hardworking, tenacious student who it working to secure prosperous future for himself studying here at the University of New England.

PLT #2

Alex Case

PLT2

Summary Draft 1

The power of a few words can go a long way. The power of “yet” and “not yet” go much deeper than anyone that hears those words would think. By focusing on “yet” and “not yet” instead of giving people in school letter grades it overlooks the bigger problem that kids are failing out of school which just makes them discouraged and not wanting to even go or even think about learning. The idea that the yet and not yet system will work using a growth mindset. A growth mindset is you know you have room to improve at whatever you are doing, a fixed mindset you believe that you have no improvements to be made or you do not believe that you can get better at whatever you’re doing. In this speech she say’s “It gives you a path into the future,” referring to this yet and not yet system. I believe that it is a great idea and can put people’s mindset in the right direction instead of just failing them and having them think they failed. “This happened because the meaning of effort and difficulty were transformed.” She talks about this saying that effort and difficulty made some people feel dumb if they were “not yet” there or where they wanted to be. I personally could see how this format of using yet and not yet could work because I have never been one of the smartest people, but I do believe I put in great effort. For someone who does not know what they are doing but put in effort to try and get the best grade they can a not yet is much more motivating than someone who just gets an F. If you put into anyone’s mind that they can do what you are trying to teach them then it may take a little bit of time for them to learn it but as long as in your head and they do think they can do it. Having a growth mindset can change your learning ability for the best. When someone thinks that they are nothing they will have no more room for growth and feel stuck which then they start to tell themselves they can’t get better. Having the not yet there is saying that you can get there it is just a matter of time and effort. 

Summary Draft 2

The power of a few words can go a long way. The power of “yet” and “not yet” go much deeper than anyone that hears those words would think. By focusing on “yet” and “not yet” instead of giving people in school letter grades it overlooks the bigger problem that kids are failing out of school which just makes them discouraged and not wanting to even go or even think about learning. The idea that the yet and not yet system will work using a growth mindset. A growth mindset is you know you have room to improve at whatever you are doing, a fixed mindset you believe that you have no improvements to be made or you do not believe that you can get better at whatever you’re doing. In this speech she says “It gives you a path into the future,” referring to this yet and not yet system. I as well believe that it is a path to the future because with a growth mindset you will keep doing the things you need to do until you are where you want to be. I believe that it is a great idea and can put people’s mindset in the right direction instead of just failing them. “This happened because the meaning of effort and difficulty were transformed.” She talks about this quote saying that effort and difficulty made some people feel dumb if they were “not yet” there or where they wanted to be, if you put into anyone’s mind that they can do what you are trying to teach them then it may take a little bit of time for them to learn it but as long as in your head and they do think they can do it. Having a growth mindset can change your learning ability for the best. When someone thinks that they are nothing they will have no more room for growth and feel stuck with that fixed mindset which then they start to tell themselves they cannot get better. Having the not yet there is saying that you can get there it is just a matter of time and effort.

Summary Draft 3

The power of a few words can go a long way. The power of “yet” and “not yet” go much deeper than anyone that hears those words would think. By focusing on “yet” and “not yet” instead of giving people in school letter grades it overlooks the bigger problem that kids are failing out of school which just makes them discouraged and not wanting to even go or even think about learning. The idea that the yet and not yet system will work using a growth mindset. A growth mindset is you know you have room to improve at whatever you are doing, a fixed mindset you believe that you have no improvements to be made or you do not believe that you can get better at whatever you’re doing. In this speech she says “It gives you a path into the future,” referring to this yet and not yet system. I as well believe that it is a path to the future because with a growth mindset you will keep doing the things you need to do until you are where you want to be. I believe that it is a great idea and can put people’s mindset in the right direction instead of just failing them. “This happened because the meaning of effort and difficulty were transformed.” She talks about this quote saying that effort and difficulty made some people feel dumb if they were “not yet” there or where they wanted to be, if you put into anyone’s mind that they can do what you are trying to teach them then it may take a little bit of time for them to learn it but as long as in your head and they do think they can do it. Having a growth mindset can change your learning ability for the best. A growth mindset is all about the way you perceive something, to some people it may seem preposterous to see growth in what they are doing but they are just not there yet. When someone thinks that they are nothing they will have no more room for growth and feel stuck with that fixed mindset which then they start to tell themselves they cannot get better. Having the not yet there is saying that you can get there it is just a matter of time and effort. This system puts in the thought of people’s mind that they will get there if they just keep striving. A connection you could look as this as could be sports, any sport you are not perfected at but the more you practice and practice the easier and better it will come to you because of your effort in trying to succeed. Not yet and yet are two terms that can either motivate someone for the best or stop them in their tracks where they think they are at the end of their peak.

Introduction

A growth mindset is a very valuable thing to have as a student. Having a fixed mindset can lead you to a place that can standstill where you would like to be in the future. I believe in the past I have had a fixed mindset and converted it into a growth mindset realizing what I was being taught and how much better I could become as a student. For example, when we first got to school I was stuck writing a five paragraph format essay and always resorting back to following that structure. After being introduced to Dweck who made the speech, “The power of yet” I moved beyond that being coached in this yet and not yet system. This yet and not yet system consists of “Yet” as a grade as well as “not yet.” The inspiration here is to try and get kids who have fixed mindsets to excel more with their work and hopefully get to the point they would like to be. Dweck uses this yet and not yet system because she believes that this will motivate the people who are not there yet to keep striving toward the goal they are trying to get to. Realizing that I was not there yet and needed to keep improving I kept trying to stay away from the format I had always known and used. This system is trying to move all unmotivated people to become motivated in a way to success.

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Dweck truly makes you believe in her new learning system. In the power of the words yet and not yet. In Dweck’s speech she talks about both sides of “yet” and “not yet” saying that some kids that may not be there yet or the ones that accepted a challenge had more of a growth mindset meaning they understood that their abilities could be developed further than they are in the moment. Other students also had a fixed mindset perspective, meaning they think there is no more improvement that they could make. Just about six minutes into the speech she states “students who were not taught this growth mindset continued to show declining grades over this difficult school transition, but those who were taught this lesson showed a sharp rebound in their grades.” In this particular study it means that if you believed in the system of yet and not yet and put the effort in to try and transform the way of learning and believe that you will get there all the kids taught this learning mindset had improvements in their grades. Dweck really emphasizes the fact that you need to sell the students on learning that growth mindset, she also talks about how the kids who are slacking off in a class and not doing so well need to know that there is a way they can do better. Saying “not yet” as opposed to getting a failing letter grade is much more impending. I have a personal experience I can relate to this, while in high school I was never good in math and it just did not come easy to me so I started to slack off and do bad and was just giving up. If I had the growth mindset thinking that if I just keep trying to get better and better and improvements in the work I was doing would start to show. Most kids while in that stuck moment where they don’t know what to do will just fall back and give up completely but with this new learning process kids will learning more and start to see successful results.

 

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A thirteen year old boy wrote a letter to her she talks about which says “ Dear Professor Dweck, I appreciate that your writing is based on solid scientific research, and that’s why I decided to put it into practice. I put more effort into my schoolwork, into my relationship with my family, and into my relationships with kids at school, and I experienced great improvement in all of those areas. I now realize I’ve wasted most of my life.” To me the first thing I think of when I hear this is that this system is convincing and scientifically proven to work. This learning system was life changing for that 13 year old boy and he took it even further than just work he bettered his life with family and friends so much saying in the end he “wasted most of my life.” Having this learning growth mindset have such a major impact on the mind and having things better in a great way for the future path. A big part of this learning lesson is making sure that you believe in what this knew teaching method is doing for you. Dweck talks about kids that get put into a mindset where they can not be let out or feel as wherever they are as trapped. Kids stuck in the situation do not believe they will succeed. After hearing this ted talk done by Dweck, it has really put me in a mindset that if I just keep grinding and doing what I need to have done get done then you can just keep excelling.  Having the mindset that this boy did with great outlook and seeing the future puts you where you will find that success.

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This learning strategy also has potential in other areas like their strategies, focus, and their perseverance. Process praise is a great way to help students get out of a mindset that they cannot do something. Dweck explains, saying “this process praise creates kids who are hardy and resilient.” She talks about a study that was done at the University of Washington where they created a new online math game that awarded “yet.” Students in this game were rewarded for their effort and progress throughout the problems. The process seems to be rewarding in this study because the kids using this method of yet and not yet gave more effort, strategies and their engagement was better over a longer period of time. When it came to hard problems the students had more perseverance while they were struggling using the yet and not yet. I have also been in this situation before, as a student I have never gotten anything that truly came easy to me so I have always had a little struggle no matter what in school I was doing. Having a mindset that you can do it even when the problems get hard and be able to maintain a high focus is key in school because most people will not know everything when they are being taught it. She then moves on to talk about how there is also other “rewards.”Starting to think that you can understand the material and become a better student in all expects with the mindset that you will get there. This learning mindset can be a huge step in the right direction for all students that struggle with school. Dweck makes many great points in her talk about this yet and not yet system benefiting people in many different ways.

artifact 3

I interviewed Noah from Rhode Island,

Why did you decide to come to UNE?

I decided to come to University of New England because it was the right fit for what I wanted to do when I grow up.

What do you think about UNE now?

UNE is a school that I would go to for academics and I believe that things are pretty boring around here.

What makes things boring and why?

Things are pretty basic most of the time “I could walk outside my door and see no one.” There is never much going on around campus it is just people walking to and from their classes.

Would you recommend attending UNE to perspective students?

I would if you are looking for good academic schooling but if you want the party college experience it will not full fill expectations.

Are you involved in any extracurricular activities? 

Many clubs around campus such as philosophy club, ocean club, pre dental club, as well as flag football.

What is your biggest priority this semester and why?

The biggest thing at UNE is maintaining a good grade point average and trying as hard as I can.

I also interviewed Hannah from Massachusetts,

Why did you decide to come to UNE?

I decided to come to UNE because my mother attended it and she thought it would fit me well.

What do you think about UNE now?

UNE is not the most entertaining place but the food is good, UNE’s academics are very challenging but I know it will pay off.

Why do you think UNE is not entertaining?

There is not much to do around campus even though it is a smaller school. I like the size of the classes having them being small is a better learning environment.

Are you involved in any extracurricular activities?

I am a member of the (OT) Occupational Therapy Club.

What is your biggest priority this semester and why?

My biggest priority is getting through bio class with a good grade.

Lastly the third person I interviewed was Julia who is on the dance team,

Why did you decide to come to UNE?

I decided to come the UNE because I could continue my passion for dance, and the had the health care/ animal studies that I wanted to pursue.

What do you think about UNE now?

I like UNE a lot so far.

What are some reasons you like UNE?

I like the environment with the small classes and campus. I like that they have the major that I want to go along with and all the friends I have met so far are amazing.

Would you recommend attending UNE to perspective students?

Yes I would if they want to go in to the science/healthcare field, also they will meet some friends they will have a blast with.

Are you involved in any extracurricular activities?

I am on the dance team.

What is your biggest priority this semester and why?

I want to try not failing out of college while having a fun time with everyone I have met.

 

Review Paper Suggestions

I can see that you are trying to give a overview of the whole article. You did this pretty well. But to improve this I would describe their arguments rather than just tell us that there is tension. There is a template on page 11 in they say i say that I believe could help benefit you as you introduce the argument. This is a medium priority change.

It looks like you are describing Singers argument about speciesism and equality for the animals. Also you talked about the impact it’s having on the world. You gave Singers argument pretty well but I cant tell what you think about those ideas. For example, what do you think about speciesism? I think it would be good if you talk about your thought on human superiority leading to the exploitation of animals. I think this is on the higher priority side because as a reader we should know what you think.

 

Hannah B’s

I like how you talk about your personal experiences and relate it back to the Ted talk. Once you give your example, explaining a little more in how it is connected to your life and the ted talk. I also liked how you introduced all of the ted talks in the beginning which it started off more broad and then you focused down into one of the speeches. One thing I would incorporate into the paper is more on the opposing sides when you bring them up. You acknowledge them and then just go away from it, I think as the reader it would be good to talk about why it may or may not work, or how it connects or does not connect with you.

 

Grace S

I like how you start off the paper not just introducing what you will be talking about right away but you lead into it. I also like how you connect back to highschool and show this is what it was back then and this is how it is now. The connections you make back to college are very well done and shows the not yet and yet system well. One thing I may try to add is a little more of how you feel and benefit from all the situations you do a great job of summarizing what is going on but maybe a little more of your perspective.

Artifact 2

Alex Case

Ocean Club as it is now is a revival of an old club also called Ocean Club that fell apart after the then current leaders graduated in spring of 2017. It’s mission is to help clean up the ocean and beaches around the coast of the school and Maine to make them as clean as possible as you know some people do not like to clean up after themselves. I contacted one of the leaders of the club Renee Roth and she gave him the information I needed for my assignment, she was in the club when it was running before the people graduated in the spring and really like it so it was her idea to make the club become up and running again. This club is interesting to me because as someone who did not live near the ocean in my small town in Connecticut it makes sense that people who have been around to cherish how beautiful our environment around us really is. To get involved into this club is very easy, you need to attend the meetings that our held or just show up to the events that they put on. The ocean club is looking to make a good impact in our world which I believe is a very good cause, most things just get brushed out of the way but if it was not for good people volunteering and going to clean up our beaches and things around the ocean who knows what potential garbage and mess it could end up looking like.

If someone was to go and join the ocean club I believe it would benefit them in many different ways. One way I see is that it looks good as a general human being. Most people in their free time will go out and do things that mean nothing to the world which in the end may end up littering on these beaches and causing a mess that was not there in the first place. If you sign up for this club not only would it be a good resume builder as it shows you are active with your community but you want to do good in the world and make a change where changes are needed. This would enrich your college experience to join this club as well because you can meet people that also want to make a change in the world for the better. Joining the ocean club has many benefits that I can see and I believe that if you want to be a better person and go help and explore the wonderful environment around us in Maine this is a wonderful option. The ocean club is here to teach you and help make the world a better place.